Welcome to Your Mystery Story Page! This is the sweet spot to post your best effort at writing a mystery! This is also the place to post two stars and a wish about the other stories you read. Two stars are positive things you see in the story and your wish is constructive feedback on how to specifically improve the story.
So, to recap....which means go over again, post your story here after you've done some in class editing with your peers and then post it online for the world to see. The other people who are part of your team online, will post 2 stars (positive things) and one wish (constructive feedback to help make the story better). Be kind, because after all, they will do the same for you!
Mary and I were walking to school on a normal Friday morning. We were talking about what we were doing after school that night! We were deep in our conversation when we noticed Mrs. Telvon ( Our old kindergarten teacher) scraping off dried up egg off the side of her house!“ What happened?!” I asked surprised to see this.“I was away on my yearly vacation and asked Jack my neighbor to take care of thing's while I was gone!” Mrs. Telvon exclaimed upset.“ Wow! Do you know who did it?” Mary asked silently.“No, but before I left me and Jack had a little spat! He didn't want to do it because it would take up his time and he would have to miss a concert he was going to.”“ Well I'm not sure, but Mary and I will ask Jack if he saw anyone egg your house.”“ Okay, thanks girls.”
Later that day we ran into Jack at the mall.“ Hey Jack!” I exclaimed! “ Hi Kat! Whats up?” Jack asked.“ Not much I was just wondering if you saw anyone egg Mrs. T's house while you were taking care of it?”“ No I didn't see anyone.” he said nervous.“ You would tell me right?I mean your my friend.”“ Of course Kat. I have to go I need to get something to eat!”“ Okay bye!”
Later at the mall I ran into Jacks friend Jamie.“Hey” I said as I stopped him“Hi” He replied I noticed egg shell bits on his sleeve.
I was wondering if the night you went to the concert you saw anyone egg Mrs. Ts house?”
“Nope, but if I remember anything I'll tell you.”
“Okay, bye.”
On the way home we noticed pieces of egg shell trailing the way to Jacks house and a whole bunch of egg cartons in Jack garbage bin. At Jacks
“ Who do you think it is?” Mary asked.
“ I think I have a clue.” SOLVE THE MYSTERY!
Seeing egg cartons and egg shell bits to Jacks house made me think it was him!!
Later at the mall I caught up to Jamie “ Why did you do it?” I asked.
“ I don't know I guess I was mad at Mrs.T for doing that to Jamie that instead of him doing it I would and he wouldn't get in trouble.”
“ Why don't you come forward?”
“I guess I will.”
Later he apologized and every thing was solved!
As I walked into the Calgary Mall and to my favorite sports store, “Dream Team.” The owner Yavis had been away yesterday and his only employee, Jim took care of the store while he was gone. When I got there Yavis was scrubbing away orange spray paint and there were hand prints and words saying, “Scream Team”.
“What happened?” I looked around, taking it in.
“When I came in the store was like this it was still a bit wet. So it must have been done this morning!”
“ Would anyone have a reason to do this?” I asked.
“Jim and I got in a little spat over a raise, moneys tight.”
I walked out and wandered the store for any clue. Nothing.
I wandered the mall. Fifteen minutes later I found a store that carried spraypaint and it was orange, I read the back and it stated it stained skin for awhile. So the culprit would have orange hands. I ran into Avril, Jim's girlfriend.
“Have you seen Jim?” I asked. Looking up at her.
“Yeah he's in the cafeteria.” And she walked away. I ran to the cafeteria. And there was Jim , but something was wrong I looked at his hands...
… they were not orange...
Try to solve the mystery....
Then I recalled Avril was wearing gloves. Boom!!! I got it now Jim must have told Avril, she got mad at Yavis. I get it now. I found her again at a frozen yogurt shop. “Avril!”I yelled I went right up to her. “Why did you do it?”
“ Ok I'm sorry. I just...He was...I don't know! Jim was so upset and he was broke.”
“Why didn't you just tell Yavis your sorry.”
“I'd get in huge trouble the police would get involved!”
“ I am sure if you just give him an apology, he will forgive you.” I told her.
“ Do you really think so.? Ok I'll go. Thank you Madiline. And I am really sorry.” And with that she walked off. I waited a few minutes and then ran after her.
As I got there she was walking out a smile on her face.
“ He did forgive me and no charges will be pressed. I'm off the hook!”
I gave her my best smile and then Yavis came out.
“ Thank you Madiline. For everything.”
“No problem, I was happy to help you.” I exlaimed.
Drown in lies
by PrincessPurple As I watch the last bubbles of air escape. Her lips close for a final time. Her eyes dull, their sparkle gone. Her short brown hair like a sandy halo around her head. Her skin turns cold and icy. Come Back!I call out, yet in her body there is no presence. No life. She is gone lost forever, to the murky green water called the sea. Then as if by magic her hand lifts, yet it is only the the waves rolling up onto the sandy shore.
Welcome to Your Mystery Story Page! This is the sweet spot to post your best effort at writing a mystery! This is also the place to post two stars and a wish about the other stories you read. Two stars are positive things you see in the story and your wish is constructive feedback on how to specifically improve the story.
So, to recap....which means go over again, post your story here after you've done some in class editing with your peers and then post it online for the world to see. The other people who are part of your team online, will post 2 stars (positive things) and one wish (constructive feedback to help make the story better). Be kind, because after all, they will do the same for you!
The Mystery of the Egging
by Angel
Mary and I were walking to school on a normal Friday morning. We were talking about what we were doing after school that night! We were deep in our conversation when we noticed Mrs. Telvon ( Our old kindergarten teacher) scraping off dried up egg off the side of her house!“ What happened?!” I asked surprised to see this.“I was away on my yearly vacation and asked Jack my neighbor to take care of thing's while I was gone!” Mrs. Telvon exclaimed upset.“ Wow! Do you know who did it?” Mary asked silently.“No, but before I left me and Jack had a little spat! He didn't want to do it because it would take up his time and he would have to miss a concert he was going to.”“ Well I'm not sure, but Mary and I will ask Jack if he saw anyone egg your house.”“ Okay, thanks girls.”
Later that day we ran into Jack at the mall.“ Hey Jack!” I exclaimed! “ Hi Kat! Whats up?” Jack asked.“ Not much I was just wondering if you saw anyone egg Mrs. T's house while you were taking care of it?”“ No I didn't see anyone.” he said nervous.“ You would tell me right?I mean your my friend.”“ Of course Kat. I have to go I need to get something to eat!”“ Okay bye!”
Later at the mall I ran into Jacks friend Jamie.“Hey” I said as I stopped him“Hi” He replied I noticed egg shell bits on his sleeve.
I was wondering if the night you went to the concert you saw anyone egg Mrs. Ts house?”
“Nope, but if I remember anything I'll tell you.”
“Okay, bye.”
On the way home we noticed pieces of egg shell trailing the way to Jacks house and a whole bunch of egg cartons in Jack garbage bin. At Jacks
“ Who do you think it is?” Mary asked.
“ I think I have a clue.”
SOLVE THE MYSTERY!
Seeing egg cartons and egg shell bits to Jacks house made me think it was him!!
Later at the mall I caught up to Jamie “ Why did you do it?” I asked.
“ I don't know I guess I was mad at Mrs.T for doing that to Jamie that instead of him doing it I would and he wouldn't get in trouble.”
“ Why don't you come forward?”
“I guess I will.”
Later he apologized and every thing was solved!
Hands On
by
PrincessPurple
As I walked into the Calgary Mall and to my favorite sports store, “Dream Team.” The owner Yavis had been away yesterday and his only employee, Jim took care of the store while he was gone. When I got there Yavis was scrubbing away orange spray paint and there were hand prints and words saying, “Scream Team”.
“What happened?” I looked around, taking it in.
“When I came in the store was like this it was still a bit wet. So it must have been done this morning!”
“ Would anyone have a reason to do this?” I asked.
“Jim and I got in a little spat over a raise, moneys tight.”
I walked out and wandered the store for any clue. Nothing.
I wandered the mall. Fifteen minutes later I found a store that carried spraypaint and it was orange, I read the back and it stated it stained skin for awhile. So the culprit would have orange hands. I ran into Avril, Jim's girlfriend.
“Have you seen Jim?” I asked. Looking up at her.
“Yeah he's in the cafeteria.” And she walked away. I ran to the cafeteria. And there was Jim , but something was wrong I looked at his hands...
… they were not orange...
Try to solve the mystery....
Then I recalled Avril was wearing gloves. Boom!!! I got it now Jim must have told Avril, she got mad at Yavis. I get it now. I found her again at a frozen yogurt shop. “Avril!”I yelled I went right up to her. “Why did you do it?”
“ Ok I'm sorry. I just...He was...I don't know! Jim was so upset and he was broke.”
“Why didn't you just tell Yavis your sorry.”
“I'd get in huge trouble the police would get involved!”
“ I am sure if you just give him an apology, he will forgive you.” I told her.
“ Do you really think so.? Ok I'll go. Thank you Madiline. And I am really sorry.” And with that she walked off. I waited a few minutes and then ran after her.
As I got there she was walking out a smile on her face.
“ He did forgive me and no charges will be pressed. I'm off the hook!”
I gave her my best smile and then Yavis came out.
“ Thank you Madiline. For everything.”
“No problem, I was happy to help you.” I exlaimed.
Drown in lies
by
PrincessPurple
As I watch the last bubbles of air escape. Her lips close for a final time. Her eyes dull, their sparkle gone. Her short brown hair like a sandy halo around her head. Her skin turns cold and icy. Come Back! I call out, yet in her body there is no presence. No life. She is gone lost forever, to the murky green water called the sea. Then as if by magic her hand lifts, yet it is only the the waves rolling up onto the sandy shore.